who

Second comment: why it is weak: too many "I's" need to fictionalize it. the formalists already hate you and your work;literally they hate it because it is not compressed into compound fractures of bullshit, and anal retentive backassedness. when u are fiction. who give a cant love you is neither fictive or episteme~ them that fault line posie into repressive fer powr/these are what one might call the British: the British invented anality.

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who says i can't love you
forgive me
if you forgive me
my tears are waterfalls

leading then
to our reunion
clasped



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times

imes


dream ~ yer body
arms en ~ over there yr lips
across the room ~
here yr hand
missing ~

between yr
yr taste

favoured by all desired by everyman every woman
wanted by I most of all~
cutting between spaces
you arrive


water falls ~
yr
eyes
&
mine
meet

you know the moment

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Comment:
weak I think
agreed

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3rd comment
terrific songs!
enviable.
enuff for female readers
to want to go to ... you know
where! with you!
Oh Ooolalalala ~