____________the below is what you call a really bad poem too slusky to be real_____
' Snow falls sideways and | it still does April
Im thinking how you fall | side off kilter in the great blue
Of the o an q the sea strange | places bedroom doors wondering
What you do finding love before | spring aftermath the triune grasp
Too many to wonder how you are | too bliss beautiful back then to look
Except momentarily beauti | your arms and the glance
My mouth hurts think of it | of you your love killing me
It’s darned | nail under oath
Under path hardly seeing at all
Anyhow it hardly matters
You’re the one I’m thinking about '
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CP Can it be saved? I mean fixed? built up?
CD Lets see what happens ... time being of the essence
its so bad I just want to smash it
How can you smash such a thing barely exiting/
?
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'to break the back of the pentameter'
that odd oodle above does not do
